First semester porfolio- piece i would like to revise

The piece I would like to revise, would probably be the piece on how I fell off of the giant stone jackrabbit. I thought of this story when she said if we had any injuries that we wanted to write about. So I thought which one I should write about (I have allot of them by the way). So I picked it, and I just wrote the concept of the whole story. But I would like to change it a little bit so it makes more sense, and tells a little more about what happened, and add some things like an awwubis to make it sound better. That’s why I would like to change it because I think it could be way better than it already is. The genre of the story is a short story.drew